Double Subjects
We cannot have two subjects in the same sentence, even if they are the same.
The squirrel that crawled down our chimney it did much damage.
Hearing breaking glass, Aaron ran to his truck that Kaylon was throwing rocks at it.
Not Logical
The subject has to agree with it’s predicate.
Under the revised plan, the provinces, who now receive transfer payments, will be reduced.
Where and When Sentences
If you use when and where in a sentence, make sure you use it correctly.
Anorexia is where people won’t eat because they think they’re fat.
Choppy Sentences
Short sentences are used to draw attention, and should be used for important sentences only. If you have too many short sentences it looks choppy. You can fix choppy sentences by using the three methods already discussed or this method:
The trees vary in height. They measure from thirty to fifty feet. They are home to many animals.
The trees, which vary in height from thirty to fifty feet, are home to many animals.
Combine the following choppy sentences into one larger one.
1. The car is very old. I drive everyday.
2. The movie was very exciting. Tom Cruise had the leading role.
3. A new Play Station is very expensive. It is a lot of fun to play.
4. Fruit is a part of a healthy diet. Fruit can be bought at the supermarket.
5. Steven King’s new book is over 500 pages long. It is very scary.
Use different methods to write good sentences
1. We had dinner at Sharlene’s house, and we had pizza, she is a good cook.
2. The kids were playing their game on the street, an elder told them it was dangerous and they moved there game to the park.
3. His favourite movie is star wars and he pretends his dog is a wookie and he saves our house from Darth Vader.
4. He earned extra money doing yard work and he saved $200, enough to buy a guitar.
5. In Math class we were learning about exponents this morning it was to early to do math.
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